Ensign Verhiz Zecks Bio

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Verhiz was born in the year 2347 he grew up in a small town in Germany. When he was 7 his Father died in a training accident. Shortly after that that he and his mother moved to France were he became good friends with a merchant. The merchant went in to space about 12 times a year to sell his goods to other merchants. When he was 11 the merchant took him into space for the first time he loved it so much he wanted to join Starfleet. When he was 12 he worked for the merchant and when the merchant died 4 years later he took over. He took his cargo shuttle in to space for 2 more years before he joined Starfleet. When he was 18 he was assigned to serve on Starbase 49 were he still serves today as a Weapons Specialist.